December 20th, 2015, 1:21 pm

vol1_ch04_p113

yolo ... :P

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December 20th, 2015, 1:30 pm

I hope it's clear what's happening here.

In other news I've updated the characters section and hopefully it's easier to understand now. I've also added a section about how our characters' names work. Additionally there's a new page with family trees of the major characters so that it'll be easier to figure out how they are connected. I hope these will be helpful. :-)


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December 21st, 2015, 6:04 am

If only I could put links... this is basically my reaction * U *
watch?v=_0YKrA12C2o at youtube

December 21st, 2015, 9:46 am

@Fangirl
I'm not exactly sure how to interpret your reaction ... XD

December 21st, 2015, 10:45 am

Very nice assets. XD

December 21st, 2015, 1:31 pm

@'Ryn awkward flirting is awkward, but it works?

December 21st, 2015, 3:05 pm

Suprise, excitement, and extreme happiness XD I literally went woooaaaahhhhh!!! when I saw this. I haven't expected things of this nature to appear so quickly XD

December 22nd, 2015, 11:28 am

@Fangirl
I'm glad. I was worried how people will react to this. I was scared you were appalled.

December 23rd, 2015, 5:12 pm

Well, I do worry a bit how Uene will react (maybe it was too sudden turn of events for her? I mean he just grabbed her like that and bam, kiss), but I hope things will go relatively well. I also wonder how much honesty Zenwu'a actions really carry.
But either way, it's a pleasure to see such well drawn and exetuced kiss scene <3

December 23rd, 2015, 7:08 pm

@Fangirl

Argh... Actually, it's Uene who initiated the kiss. We added a thought bubble and hopefully it's clearer now.
We were worried this page may turn out confusing. We didn't want to add a thought bubble to explain it, because it was supposed to be this "spur of the moment" actions which are accually not preceded by any thought process. But well, we need to defed Zenwu (or out him as someone whose game isn't that strong). Maybe the next page would clarify this one, but maybe things would get even more confusing...

December 24th, 2015, 5:21 am

Oh dear '_ ' I think I will explain why I thought that way:

I think it's because of their poses in the last frame. Uene is portrayed in the middle of a movement, her pose angled out of balance, she's literally sitting on one hip now, both of her arms are yet relaxed and following the trajectory of "fall" as she was catched off guard when pulled by Zenwu, and didn't manage to react yet.

It turn, Zenwu's pose is really firm, collected, and balanced, and while his hand on Uene's arm is kinda too relaxed to indicate he put much strenght into grabbing her (I mean, it really looks like it's just laying softly on her elbow, I don't think he would pull a woman of this posture towards himself that easily, unless the rule of Standard Female Grab Area works in your universe xD), but it still indicates taking an action first, and she still looks "falling" to me. In my mind he saw Uene blushing, and decided "now or never" and maybe since he's secretly more domineering than he lets on, he pulled her towards himself, instead on coming closer to her himself.

Uene's unbalanced pose indicates suprise and emotional openess, Zenwu's pose indicates control, initiative, but still emotionally "introverted", collected one (even such things as their legs, he sits in proper and formal japanese fanshion, while hers are posed in more relaxed, non-formal, non-elegant way).


I saw Uene frowning in this fourth panel, but I interpreted it as her getting a tad angry, guarded and suspicious after her initial *blushie-blushie* reaction. I thought she was truly getting flustered and emotional there, but then immidiately thought "wait wait wait, I can't let myself be flattered so easily, I mean I respect that person, but I'm still bit wary of him for good reasons" (Yes I kinda think she's wary of Zenwu even if he may be attractive to her).
And Zenwu somehow noticed that change of expression, and decided to kiss her before she starts dwelling on those thoughts too much, as a means of distraction.


I don't know, maybe if Uene was grabbing him by his shoulders (which would be kinda cool call-back and reincorporation to the pages 96-97)or if she was supporting her weight with her right arm just like Zenwu does with his left, and having her left hand/arm placed firmly on her knee that would make things clear. She would express taking initiative, but instead of calculated and domineering "pulling towards" she'd show the passionate "rushing forward" at the person with collected posture, who in turn would appear passive and shy in such scenario. They's still be "in character" but that would completly flip the dynamics od dominance....

ugh or maybe I'm reading too much into it. XD

December 24th, 2015, 7:57 am

@Fangirl:
Gaah, the confusion is all my fault.
You are right with Uene looking off-balance and Zenwu looking grounded - he didn't move an inch and she sort of pushed herself towards him - or at least this is how it was supposed to look. As you mentioned, the problem is her right arm - i couldn't show her resting her weight on it, because of the wound (i felt it would be nonsensical to show her with a bandage if it had no impact on how she acts) and well, i didn't want this kiss to be as forceful as the grab-and-shake scene from page 97. And the frown in panel 4 was supposed to be Uene thinking: yolo ><' And the fact that Zenwu touches her at all was my decision that given his quick reflexes he wouldn't just sit her like a complete klutz, but react.
Your interpretation makes perfect sense, though... And i really appreciate the in-depth analysis, it helps a lot.

Oh, and Happy Holidays and a Great New Year!

December 25th, 2015, 8:00 am

Happy Holidays/Merry Christmass to both of you too <3

Hmm, I think if she can pull her weight when getting on and off a horse without additional help, and experiences no pain/discomfort during rides (bouncing shock during trotting/galloping and all that stuff), then it shouldn't be as bad... I don't ride horses though (I very much preffer to watch them from a distance XD), so I may be wrong on that hunch - I only know it's not advised to ride horses with fresh injuries, BUT I only heard that in regards of broken, not cut arms.

Anyway, hmmm...I think, if her wounded arm had it's hand resting on her right thight, and her left hand was resting softly on Zenwu's arm, or even cheek (and his hand would touch her left elbow instead of the right one), then it would be more readable as her own initiative. And her weight would be supported not by injured arm, but the right thight and right knee (they may need to be positioned a tad lower though, cause now they look like they're mid-air, instead of touching the ground).

The biggest problem I have with are definitely her loose hands and arms. They remind me of those comic frames where the character is falling, but they didn't fully grasp the situation yet, and kindaaa sooorta start reaching for something, but still have yet to process the situation to do something specific like grabbing or even tensing the muscles.

Ugh, I'm starting to feel like I'm too harsh. I don't intend to be, I just want to explain myself clearly and give some ideas to justify my opinion. All in all I think this image is GREAT, the sense of motion and anathomy is amazing, and I love it overall! I wouldn't even think those things regarding the body language if it didn't turn out I was wrong about deciphering the dynamics.

December 25th, 2015, 4:59 pm

@Fangirl

Please don't worry about the criticism and analysis. It's actually very helpful. We are learning as we go along. Almost everything here is a first for us as story tellers, for Joolita as an artist and for me as website supervisor (as I look at the comments section i feel so ashamed that my css game is too weak to make it look presentable).
And we are actually glad for every comment we receive, because we are very self-conscious about how well are we able to communicate our ideas. When people say nothing we just don't know. And we also can't improve anything if we don't know that something is wrong.

April 15th, 2017, 6:59 pm

ALWAYS go for it after a blush like that, good man!

April 22nd, 2017, 11:21 am

@Frogsnack

:D

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